EXAMINING ENGLISH BUSINESS LETTERS
Now let's turn to the practical point of writing business letters. They may be
divided into official and semi-official. The first kind of letters is characteristic of those
people working in business: an executive, a department manager, a salesman, a secretary or
a specialist in business and technology. But also many people may want to buy something, to accept an invitation or to
congratulate somebody - this is a kind of semi-official letters. The first kind of letters may in turn be subdivided into such groups as: inquiries, offers, orders, and so
on. I am going to examine this group more carefully looking at the correspondence of Chicago businessmen and English manufactures.
Example 1.
MATTHEWS & WILSON
Ladies 'Clothing
421 Michigan Avenue
Chicago, III.60602
Messrs GRANT & CLARKSON
148 Mortimer Street
London WIC 37D
England October 21, 1993
Gentlemen:
We saw your women's dresses and suits at the London Fashion Show held in New York on October
17. The lines you showed for teenagers, the "Swinger" dresses and trouser suits would be most suitable for our market.
Would you kindly send us your quotation for spring and summer clothing that you
could supply to us by the end of January next. We would require 2,000 dresses and suits in each of
the sizes 10-14, and 500 in sizes 8 and 16. Please quote cif Chicago prices. Payment
is normally made by letter of credit.
Thank you for an early reply.
Very truly yours,
P.Wilson.Jr
Buyer
.
This is undoubtedly an import inquiry letter. In the first part of a letter there
is a kind of introduction as a prospective customer approaches supplier for the first time, and
it is
from this part that we found out that the correspondents are engaged in textile
industry.
The second part expresses request for detailed information about the goods in question, their prices and terms of possible transaction.
In this example we come across the abbreviation concerning the terms of
delivery, that is commonly accepted in the business world. It is interesting to know what this kind of
abbreviations means:
c.i.f. - Cost, insurance, freight.
If consignment is to be delivered according to cif, then the supplier
insures the goods and pays for the whole delivery.
f.o.b. - Free on board.
If consignment is to be delivered according to fob, then the supplier pays for transportation to port, steamer or air shipment and dispatch; and the customer pays
for onward transportation and insurance.
f.o.r. - Free on rail.
It is the same as fob, but for railway transportation.
c & f - cost and freight.
If consignment is to be delivered according to c & f, then the supplier
pays for the whole delivery and the customer - for insurance.
It is worth mentioning here that the whole letter is written in a highly
polite way, nevertheless it is quite precise and sticks to the point.
Example2
GRANT & CLARKSON
148 Mortimer Street
London W1C 37D
MATTHEWS & WILSON
Ladies 'Clothing
421 Michigan Avenue
Chicago, III.60602 30th October, 1996
Dear Sirs,
We are pleased to make you an offer regarding our 'Swinger' dresses and trouser suits in the size you require. Nearly all the
models you saw at our fashion show are obtainable, except trouser suits in pink, of which the smaller sizes have been sold out. This line is being manufactured
continuously, but will only be available again in February, so could be delivered to you in March.
All other models can be supplied by the middle of January 1997, subject to our receiving your form order by 15th of
November. Our c.i.f. prices are understood to be for sealand transport to Chicago. If you would prefer the goods to be sent by air freight, this will be
charged extra at cost
Trouser suits sizes 8-16 in white, yellow, red, turquoise, navy blue, black
Sizes 12,14 also in pink per 100 $ 2,650.00
Swinger dresses sizes 8-16
in white, yellow, red, turquoise, black per 100 $ 1,845.00
You will be receiving price-list, cutting of our materials and a colour chart. These were airmailed to you this morning.
Yours faithfully,
F. T. Burke
Export Department
As you can clearly see it we face the second phase of business correspondence --
the answering letter. It is very important, because it adjusts the relationships between two partners. It
does not only characterise the company, but also advertises it. The purpose of the letter is to
persuade the partner that you are the best in business.
This letter contains the quotation in reply to an inquiry. In lots of similar letters the quotations are simply prices
and another information asked for. But this sample is quite the opposite: it shows the
customer that he met the sales-cautious businessman, who uses every opportunity to stimulate his
correspondents interest in his goods by including the sales message. And the assurance that the customer will receive personal
attention is read between the lines. In order to draw the attention of the customer to the products in
question the supplier offers "cuttings of our materials and a colour chart". On
the whole a firm offer is subject to certain conditions, a deadline for the receipt of orders, or a
special price for certain quantities.
Example 3.
A business transaction often starts with an inquiry which may later be followed by
an order.
Both inquiry and order are meant to arose and stimulate business activity on the part of recipient. They are typically asking
letters. Orders convey the writer's intention to do business with his correspondent, usually to buy some
goods from them.
MATTHEWS & WILSON
Ladies 'Clothing
421 Michigan Avenue
Chicago, III.60602
GRANT & CLARKSON
148 Mortimer Street
London W1C 37D November 4, 1996
Gentlemen:
Thank you for your quotation of October 30. We have pleasure in placing an order with you for
1,900 'Swinger' dresses at Price: $ 38,745
in the colours and sizes specified below:
Quantity
Size
Colour
50
8,16
white
100
10,12,14
white
50
8,16
turquoise
100
10,12,14
turquoise
50
8,16
red
100
10,12,14
red
50
16
yellow
100
10,12,14
yellow
50
16
black
100
10,12,14
black
Delivery: air freight, c.i.f., Chicago
We shall open a letter of credit with your bank as soon as we receive your order acknowledgement. Please arrange for immediate
collection and transport since we need the dresses for Christmas.
Very truly yours,
Wilson
Buyer
It is indisputably an import order, and as we can notice placing orders is simple from the point of
view of letter writing. The fact is that usually the purchasing department or the buyer fills in
an order form. But in this case the correspondent prefers to write a letter in order to make certain
points quite clear. There are special import regulations which are touched upon in the last
paragraph: it is necessary to complete formalities and to stress delivery instructions.
It should be mentioned here that the supplier must send order acknowledgement as an answer to order
promptly to thank his customer for the order and to confirm it.
If some conditions have changed, the customer must be notified. In the case
the goods ordered are no longer available, a substitute may be offered.
Example 4.
What follows the order acknowledgement is the advice of dispatch.
GRANT & CLARKSON
148 Mortimer Street
London W1C 37D
MATTHEWS & WILSON
Ladies 'Clothing
421 Michigan Avenue
Chicago, III.60602 20thNovember, 1996
Dear Sirs:
We have pleasure in notifying you that your credit was confirmed by our bank yesterday, 19th November. We have
had the 1900 'Swinger' dresses collected today for transport by British Airways to Chicago on 25th November.
Enclosed is our invoice for the goods in question plus the extra charges for air freight, packing list to facilitate
customs clearance at your end, certificate of origin, air waybill and insurance policy.
Hoping that this initial order will lead to further business, we are
Yours faithfully
F. T. Burke
Export department
The first thing to be done before writing such a letter is to examine carefully whether the partners account is valid or not. So in the first paragraph we come across phrase "your credit
was confirmed by our bank yesterday ". Air shipment for" Swinger "dresses is also mentioned here.
The next paragraph deals with the documents which are necessary while importing
goods: Invoice packing lists, certificate of origin, air waybill and insurance policy. As it is
the initial order by MATTHEWS & WILSON, the GRANT & CLARKSON hopes to encourage them to place further orders,
so their last phrase sounds very polite.
Example 5
No matter how efficient a business firm tries to be, mistakes will happen. There might be a misunderstanding about the
goods to be supplied; sometimes the consignment is dispatched too late or delays are caused
in transit; defect is discovered when the equipment is put into operation and so on.
Therefore a letter with the complaint expressed is sent.
MATTHEWS & WILSON
Ladies 'Clothing
421 Michigan Avenue
Chicago, III.60602 November 22, 1996
GRANT & CLARKSON
148 Mortimer Street
London W1C 37D
Gentlemen:
Thank you for your delivery of 'Swinger' dresses which were ordered on November 4. However we wish to draw your
attention to two matters.
Of the red dresses supplied one lot of 100 (size 12) included clothes of a lighter red than the other sizes. Since we deliver a
collection of various sizes to each store, it would be obvious to customers that the clothes are dissimilar. In addition the red belt supplied does not
match these dresses. We are returning two of these by separate mail, and would ask you to replace the whole lot by 100 dresses size 12 in the correct colour.
As far as your charges for air freight are concerned, we agree to pay the extra costs which you invoiced. However your
costs for packing and insurance must have been lower for air cargo, and we request you to take this fact into consideration and to make an adjustment to
the invoice amount. Would you please send us a rectified invoice, reduced accordingly.
We look forward to your dealing with these questions without delay.
Very truly yours.
Wilson.
If this kind of letter is sent the customer is understandably annoyed, nevertheless there is
no reason to write an angry letter of complaint. In the EXAMPLE 5 there are two complaints:
the first is about the "Swinger" dresses colour and the second - about the fact that air freight seems too expensive to MATTHEW &
WILSON.
From this letter we see that the results are better for the correspondent takes the trouble to explain his
complaint clearly and proposes ways in which matters can be put right.
Example 6.
Letters that are written in response to claims may be called adjustments. These letters are among
the most difficult to write as they require under all circumstances patience, tact, and diplomacy. You will
not lose your customer if you react at his claim promptly.
GRANT & CLARKSON
148 Mortimer Street
London W1C 37D
MATTHEWS & WILSON
Ladies 'Clothing
421 Michigan Avenue
Chicago, III.60602 2nd December, 1996
Dear Sirs:
The colour of the dresses about which you complain is indeed lighter than it should be. Apparently this was overlooked by
controller responsible. Please accept our apologies for the oversight.
We are sending you a new lot by air this week, and would ask you to return the faulty clothes at your convenience, carriage
forward. Alternatively you may keep this lot for sale as seconds at a reduced price of & 1,120.
You are perfectly correct in saying that packing and insurance costs are normally less for cargo sent by air. May we
remind you, however, in this case your request to send the goods by air was made at very short notice. It was not possible for us to use the lighter air
freight packing materials, as most of the dresses were ready for shipment by sea freight (please see our letter of 9th November). Furthermore,
our insurance is on an open policy at a flat rate, and depends on the value of the goods, not the method of transport. For these reasons our invoice No.14596
dated 15th November 1996 is still valid, and we look forward to receiving your remittance when due.
Yours faithfully
Burke
The suppliers show their understanding of situation and express their willingness to adjust it. They say exactly what steps they are going to take, because a disappointed customer cannot be
put off with mere apologies - he is entitled to know how the mistake will be remedied. The supplies convince their partners that they are really
interested in maintaining good will. They try to avoid negative statements, and what even worse, accusations; they
never forget that it is their customer who keeps them in business.
Even when they write their customers about rejecting their claim on air freight, they try to give logical reasons for the refusal.
CONCLUSION
The conclusion that therefore suggests itself is that writing of business letters is highly complicated
science. It is not enough for a good business letter writing to know lexics and grammar, but you should comprehend the
whole range of such things as: occasions on which the particular letter is written, the style of letter, useful expressions, and accepted idioms.
There are certain rules which not everybody could learn since they have to be
felt by correspondents. Letter writing requires long practice and experience. Those who write letters should always remember, that what makes the letter attractive and
therefore promotes one's business is not always the message of the letter, but it is the manner and style in which the message is written.
The "golden rule" that must be followed by every business correspondent is that the official letter should
be formal, courteous, tactful, concise, expressive, and to the point.
Bibliography
1.GOWERS, ERNEST The complete plain words
2.Naterop Business Letters for All.
